tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1620103253584263826.post7561229144121901117..comments2024-02-24T15:56:39.720-07:00Comments on Book Obsession: BeginningChristie Richhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12211149920036127908noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1620103253584263826.post-28969103823561447402011-08-30T09:38:38.746-06:002011-08-30T09:38:38.746-06:00Hi Everyone,
Judith tried to leave a comment but ...Hi Everyone,<br /><br />Judith tried to leave a comment but couldn't so I am posting it here:<br /><br />I read your first chapter and tried to reply. Couldn't figure out how to do it. But I liked it. Emma hooked me right away. I liked the idea of starting in a bazaar on a trade route. I like the mystery of the blond stranger. Did she have any fear at all when she followed him? You have plenty of tension, but that would add more. Just some small stuff: I wanted to know that Emma and Abram had gone to the cliff lots of times before to eat together before they went so that he could make his moves on her. I'd like to know why Abram chose Emma when he could have any girl in the town. Her mother or Abram could hint at the reasons why. I'm thinking she's different than other girls somehow since she's still not married and "older." I'd like to know how she's different, or at least get a hint of it. Really picky point: You say that few types of people come to their town, then only mention two. I know. A stickler. <br /><br />Thanks for commenting Judith!Christie Richhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12211149920036127908noreply@blogger.com